The overall tone of the ‘My Papa’s Waltz’ is a very dark one from the very beginning. In the first stanza, along with the father’s drinking problem, it appears that the boy still has hope for his relationship with his father. There is parallelism in the beginning and in the end, with regards to hanging on. The tone set is that of abusive desperation. “My right ear scraped a buckle” (12), is the main line that set the tone. This was not a mere cuff link or a shirt button, but a buckle from a belt. This was the clear indicator that the relationship between the father and child was an abusive one. The line following it, “You beat time on my head” further darkened the violence nature of the poem. The mother, disregarded the whole situation her family was in, making the tone feel even more desperate up to that point. The ‘waltz’ that the father and son are partaking in, is not really a dance at all. It is what happens when the father gets intoxicated and goes on a rampage. Without the underlying tone from the use of the diction, it would not be as clear as it is that the relationship is abusive. Roethke’s is able to convey quite a few emotions into such a brisk format. This allows for the reader to feel somewhat overwhelmed by how fast the actions are taking place. “Then waltzed me off to bed” (16). This line means that the father quickly took his son to bed and Roethke ends the poem while still leaving that feeling of desperation from the child.

 

 

The overall tone of the poem ‘My Papa’s Waltz’ is a dark one from the very start. In the first stanza, along with the father’s drinking problem, it appears that the boy still has hope for his relationship with his father. There is parallelism in the beginning and in the end, with regards to hanging onto the relationship. The tone set is that of abusive desperation. The main line that sets the dark tone is “My right ear scraped a buckle” (Roethke 12). This set the abusive tone because the buckle that hit the child was from a belt. This was the clear indicator that the relationship between the father and child was an abusive one. The mother, disregarded the whole situation her family was in, making the tone feel even more desperate up to that point. The ‘waltz’ that the father and son are partaking in, is not really a dance at all. It is what happens when the father gets intoxicated and goes on a rampage. Without the underlying tone from the use of the diction, it would not be as clear that the relationship is abusive. Roethke is able to convey quite a few emotions into such a brisk format. This allows for the reader to feel somewhat overwhelmed by how fast the actions are taking place. The dance ends when the child says, “Then waltzed me off to bed” (16). This line brings to a close the father’s alcoholic rampage towards the son by taking him to bed. Roethke ends the poem while still leaving that feeling of desperation from the child.

 

 

 

Self Evaluation of Essay 1:

 

Organization

  1. Strengths

I have strong transitions from body paragraph to body paragraph throughout the essay. Events are for the most part in order and make sense in my essay. I tie everything together well in my conclusion. My topic sentences are clear and strong.

  1. Weaknesses

I have failed to identify my thesis statement in my introduction. I have also failed to identify my topic sentence in my conclusion. My thesis statement is lacking a hook and could have been made stronger.

 

Content

  1. Strengths

I have ample support for majority of my claims. My claims are that the tone is dark one from the start and that the use of diction aids in conveying the tone. I interpret the syntax and diction of the poem quite well, such as the word: countenance, leading to my own explanations of the occurrences taking place. I use evidence from the text such as quotes and paraphrased material. These are now cited correctly.

  1. Weaknesses

Unfortunately, throughout my essay I am very repetitive. The diction and tone of the poem are so similar in meaning that I should have done a better job differentiating the two. Instead of bringing forth new ideas, I repeat old ones, but fail to deepen the explanation. After my second point is introduced, which is about the tone, it seems that the repetition is more evident. A deeper explanation was needed.

 

MLA

  1. Strengths

I have many examples of direct quotations and paraphrased material. I cite these like: (Roethke 12). I also pulled out several words from the poem and cited them in my essay. I have several short quotations in the essay that contribute greatly to the paper. There is evidence of an attempted citation in the draft, but then it is corrected in my final paragraph.

  1. Weaknesses

My lead-ins are either nonexistent or barely there. The quoted material is not cited correctly. My in-text citations were originally just the line number.  I should have done the author and then the line number. There is no evidence of a works cited page, which is necessary when using sources. I have since fixed that. Quoted and paraphrased material may make up majority of the paper.

 

Grammar//Punctuation//Spelling//Format

  1. Strengths

My grammar, punctuation, and spelling is well done besides a few comma splices and punctuation errors that I found. In a few areas, my grammar could have been improved. I use several literary terms in my essay and use them properly.

  1. Weaknesses

The overall format of my paper could have been improved. More paragraphs should have been added to provide enough support for my original claim, which was that the diction leads to the abusive poem. I should have chosen two supporting claims that would have helped me avoid repetition, instead of one thing leading to another and causing the paper to feel like a cause and effect essay.

 

 

 

 

Works Cited

Roethke, Theodore. “My Papa’s Waltz”. Literature and the Writing Process. By Elizabeth

McMahan. Boston: Pearson Longman, 2012. N. pag. Print.

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